LyinDan
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8/27/2016 4:41:48 PM
This song has a major problem. I'm sorry, but I just have to comment about this. Because otherwise, I wouldn't be true to my self and my rock hard principles.
Now, I love the basis and the idea behind this. And I Really love the key changes. That's the way to do it.
But. :You've mispronounced "cajole" as "control".
Sorry, disqualified. What could have been a major rock song (and don't get me wrong, that first chord? that was major. I think. Unless it was minor, but I don't think it was. Can't remember). But mispronouncing your own lyric...that has to mean the whole thing sucks.
Doesn't it? It's not like anyone else knows the lyric better than you. I mean, you wrote it, and that must mean you know it, right? So, you are disqualified if you can't even pronounce your own lyric.
And it's a shame, because the rest of it was great. Try to do better next time.
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8/28/2016 4:09:51 AM
Changes keys on every verse? My dad did one like that. Me and my late wife covered that one....
anyway,
I had to make an appearance, then I shall again turn invisible, till the next time...
This song is Great. It rocks.
Was what convinced me of Your Indelible Greatness, Time Cat.
And you, jealous cat....
throw her the wood, and smile, Kid.
I would if I still could.
Thankful for what we've got, there's the ticket.
I don't care if you're so old you can reminisce
about your high school days and Eisenhower being President.
By the way, if there ever was a realm in which you can pronounce
words pretty much any way you want to, it's rock n roll.
You ever listen to Elton John's delivery?
I couldn't make out one word of Bennie And The Jets till I read the lyric sheet.
"WHAT??"
And that was a big hit, big hit. All over da place.
So,
yeah, for the record,
this is a GREAT Song.
He's got an even better one coming out in the near future,
as soon as we figure out (Hi, we're BEATLESEX, you may have heard of us)
what the perfect instrumentation will be....
we're workin' on it.
It'll be swell once we decide on what goes where.
Say one thing for you,
good teeth for such an old cat.
Cheshire cat, by the looks of it.
Yeah I know, you weren't really busting his balls,
and I'm not really busting yours.
It's all to say, "I Love You"....
BARF.
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